Reviewer: Robert Bruce Scott Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Jun 2020 22:35 Title: Part One: Trust No One - 4

Story beginnings are always laden with introductions and it looks like you have a lot of people to introduce. Not an easy thing to do - good move doing it through action sequences that show the characters interacting. It provides a well rounded introduction while keeping narrative flowing and provides continued orientation into the primary environment the story will inhabit.

 

Thanks!! rbs

Author's Response: Admittedly, a lot of stuff is happening here including quite a bit of exposition. Not great to have so much of it in one place, but most of it is vital for this story and beyond. Glad you thought it flowed relatively well.