Date: 13 Jun 2013 00:57 Title: Chapter 11
It's a bit like Pearl Harbor in a way, and I thought a bit about the USS Arizona as I was reading about the destruction in the construction yard.
Good job on telling and showing just enough. Space battles are very, very difficult to write about. It's a lot of action and angles, and POVs, and you need to move it all very quickly as the action needs to really move and turn, much like a battle would.
No exagerration - this is one of the best fan fic battle scenes I think I have ever read.
Date: 11 Jan 2010 19:06 Title: Chapter 11
Whoa! An explosive chapter. The sh*t hits the fan here. Dramatic and calmatic events. Very gripping. Ba'el/Joker has a crazy assed scheme that I'm eager to see. Whether it will pay off as Kalara's tactics seemed to have. Mind I dare say she does not take kindly to having her orders questioned, especially not in that kind of situation. Me thinks the lieutenant so eager to call her up on her decisions might regret that. Lots happening and all of it brillaintly conveyed in an exciting brisk pace with some awesome imagery - the burning helmet hitting the fighter for one.
Author's Response: Thanks so much, glad you enjoyed this. I originally had planned what is now turning into a four volume story all in one. The fact that it spun off into four volumes really started here with this attack by the Klingons. Everything went out of control from there, in a good way!
[Report This]Date: 10 Sep 2009 13:15 Title: Chapter 11
You really know how to blow things up! Someone had better pay for the destruction of that Starbase ... not good.
I loved the description of the tactical interface. Very cool stuff.
[Report This]Date: 10 Sep 2009 08:32 Title: Chapter 11
How are you going to put Humpty-Dumpty back together? the Fleet HQ is probably shattered....
Date: 10 Sep 2009 00:08 Title: Chapter 11
This is a riveting battle sequence with well paced action. One wonders how this new fragile Federation will handle the destruction of one of it's most significant outposts and the presumed destruction of much of the surface of Romulus?
Keep it coming! 