[Report This]Date: 15 Jul 2020 14:56 Title: Part 1
Another great 007 jump start into the story! The reader can pick up the details along the way, but evidently dealing with a culture/technology analagous to late 20th Century Earth, complete with mysteriously named terrorist groups.
Nice choice to start the action at an airport (not a spaceport), which quickly cues the reader about what sort of culture might be involved - and evidently one of those mind-numbing gray areas for the prime directive if they're that concerned about a couple of phaser rifles.
Thanks!! rbs
Author's Response: The opening of this story is an almost word-for-word copy of a chapter in "All The Sinners, Saints" which is available at StarEagleAdventures.com. That story deals heavily with terrorism and fundamentalism in a world not terribly unlike ours. That one was a bit of a beast of a novel and I thought it was interesting to explore some of the consequences of that story. Albeit in a much more light-hearted manner.
Date: 16 Jul 2013 00:29 Title: Part 1
Man, do you know how to start with a bang! I'm a little lost, but I love the action and the tactical situation, and the way you went back in time in the intro, then forward to the present again at the end of the chapter. The dilemma of the two missing rifles is kind of a big deal, too, and it should be interesting to see if it's a Chekhov's Gun scenario. I have a feeling it will.
I really appreciate the way you portray the organized chaos of war, too.
Author's Response: Yeah, plenty of gun battles and explosions in the beginning. I probably didn't exactly make it easy on readers here by starting out with a segment I nearly lifted word for word out of the novel All The Sinners, Saints. The important part hopefully comes across. During a chaotic mission, two officers leave behind a couple of phaser rifles of an alien planet. Within the novel itself this action in itself only gets a passing mention. Of course now it spawned a whole other problem, not to mention it's own little story. Thanks for reading and commenting, and sticking with it even though getting a little lost in the beginning.
Date: 28 Apr 2013 01:35 Title: Part 1
Well I loved All the Sinners, Saints and I really appreciate the fact that you are following up a story with so many consequences for your own characters. But atop of that, you decide to actually follow up the consequences as they affect for the planet's population. The cause the missing rifles is very TOS like in feel and detail. It kinda strikes me as strange that TNG never quite opted to do an episode like this or follow up something from TOS given how Kirk interrupted different planets and messed witht he whole Prime Directive thing.
Character stuff here is good with the ole familiar faces and regulars but I've a feeling as you've done supremely well before, we'll be taking a closer look at some lower deck characters rather than the big names. I always love that approach and especially the fiully fleshed out characters you end up offering CeJay. Here's hoping for lots of that.
Author's Response: Thanks for reading, MF. Definitely TOS inspired here even if it is set in the 24th century and immediately after the events of All the Sinners, Saints. And you are of course absolutely correct. This is not going to be a story about the usual suspects. This is LDT. Expect some fresh new faces to make an appearance.